Seperate me from the sunlight
So that I can see what I am without it
I become my shadow
Understanding its pain
Becoming My Shadow
Seperate me from the sunlight
So that I can see what I am without it
I become my shadow
Understanding its pain
Poetry and Writings - A Mind 
Nice poem.
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Thank you Claire!
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Interesting and thought provoking material. Will be following!
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Thank you for your comment! Glad to have you onboard 🙂
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It’s simple but so deep. Awesome! ❤
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That’s what I’m aiming for! Thank you 🙂
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Really enjoyed this! Excellent!
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Thank you very much! 🙂
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Your welcome. I really enjoyed so I have to tell you cause I think it’s important getting feedback.
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I really appreciate feedback! Gives me a lot of appreciation 🙂 thanks
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Wow, that’s so thought provoking. I love it!
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Thank you so much!
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It’s a pleasure! 🙂
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Very nice, made me stop and think even in a short burst. Inspiring!
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Thank you, Diana! 🙂
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Loved this poem 🙂
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Thank you! 🙂
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Reblogged this on Shellscapades and commented:
Wow! So describes my recent past feelings. Now I have hope overflowing my Well Will Faith-Power… Thanks to everyone who showered me in their belief!
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Wow, thanks for that! I’m glad you identified with it so strongly 🙂 Thank you, Carina! Have a good evening/day
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Hitting gold, when found !
Beautifully penned
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Glad you prospected for it here! Thank you 🙂
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Hi Jack, what a wonderful poet you are, especially for such a young man! Very impressive and I’m glad you found my little corner of the world. Welcome to the fence jumpers and thanks for following my blog. I look forward to hearing more from you. @sheilamgood at Cow Pasture Chronicles
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Thank you so much for the compliment Sheila! It does wonders! Glad to have you, will be keeping an attentive eye on your blog also 🙂 Enjoy the rest of your day!
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You’re welcome and to you!
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Well said! Simple statements are sometimes the most effective. I read, sometimes you have to step outside yourself to see what’s going on with you.
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That’s exactly it, Alan. No need to use long and confusing words when you can go straight to the point with simplicity! Glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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Love the brevity and intensity of this poem! Great!
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Thank you! 🙂
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Yes! Very nice.
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Reblogged this on Femmtastic and commented:
this sums up how so many feel so succinctly good one Jack
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Thank you!! I’m glad it had an effect! 🙂
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Not bad! Personally, I think the poem really lies in the first two lines. There’s a great sense of mystery, of clean ominousness (not quite the right word, but I’ll leave it for now) in them, alongside a sense of freedom (tied to deprivation). It’s pretty interesting! Just the last two lines become a bit emo for me—telling me what to feel and think a bit too much—and there’s a contradiction in asking to be separated from the sun and then becoming shadow, which only exists because of the sun. I think you could get rid of them and just let the poem be that strange, powerful first couplet.
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Thank you for your detailed comment. I get what you mean but I firmly believe whatever comes out of me at that time, things that I write are supposed to stay as they are. I’m sure there’s a reason for it. Life is full of contradictions! Maybe if it wasn’t for the last two lines the first two wouldn’t strike so hard.
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Without light there is no shadow. There is only me , But I am real and standing not vanishing beneath feet.
I remain alive,
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